<P>8班同学优秀对句集:(顺便把自己的贴上来,作比较,以便了解自己和同学们比较存在哪方面的不足)
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对句:野渡舟横春水晚[汉广]
出句:深山鹤舞白云秋<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman"><FONT color=#000000>]</FONT>
</FONT><FONT color=#0000ff><FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman">]<FONT color=#0909f7>老师点评</FONT>:“</FONT>春水<FONT face="Times New Roman">”</FONT>对<FONT face="Times New Roman">“</FONT>白云<FONT face="Times New Roman">”</FONT>嫌宽,别的还好。
</FONT>对句:野径霜题黄叶地<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>小北<FONT face="Times New Roman">]
</FONT>出句:深山鹤舞白云秋<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman">]
</FONT><FONT color=#0033ff><FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman">]</FONT>对工、意谐,好对!
</FONT>对句:幽谷鸠鸣碧水泽<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>生死以之情<FONT face="Times New Roman">]
</FONT>出句:深山鹤舞白云秋<FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman">]
</FONT><FONT color=#0909f7><FONT face="Times New Roman">[</FONT>一帘清风<FONT face="Times New Roman">]</FONT>不错!</FONT><FONT color=#ff0000>小结:这个出句对好了不易,因为意象太多,又限定了背景、加上颜色词,还有一个<FONT face="Times New Roman">“</FONT>秋<FONT face="Times New Roman">”</FONT>字不好配,对初学者有些难了,说声抱歉!尽管大家对得不太好,但我觉得对大家又是好事,因为以后再遇到类似的出句就知道如何应付了。对这样的出句,首先要把握其意境,找出能与之相对的背景;其次要注意关键的字词,比如<FONT face="Times New Roman">“</FONT>白<FONT face="Times New Roman">”</FONT>、<FONT face="Times New Roman">“</FONT>秋<FONT face="Times New Roman">”</FONT>等。点评的不对的地方,敬请批评指正。谢谢!</FONT></P>
[此贴子已经被作者于2008-2-28 11:07:18编辑过]
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